22上海中考沖刺英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作主題修煉之從低檔

2022年新課標(biāo)下的沖刺上海中考英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作內(nèi)功修煉

（1）新課標(biāo)下對(duì)學(xué)生的英語(yǔ)能力的靈活運(yùn)用的考核又上升了一個(gè)臺(tái)階,。如明面上的詞匯量上升到2000+，就是一個(gè)最好的實(shí)例。

（2）新課標(biāo)下學(xué)生的聽(tīng)說(shuō)能力要求進(jìn)一步提高，上海中考聽(tīng)說(shuō)測(cè)試2023年開(kāi)始將從目前的10分增加到15-20分，用來(lái)篩選學(xué)生的意圖更明顯。

（2）上海初中英語(yǔ)從2023年開(kāi)始將改版，目前用了將近20年的牛津教材將成為歷史，而高中教材已于2020年率先改版，對(duì)學(xué)生的能力要求更上不止一個(gè)臺(tái)階，大家自己可以去看下。

今天開(kāi)始發(fā)幾位基礎(chǔ)中等初三學(xué)生的作文修改（坐標(biāo)：寶山楊浦區(qū)內(nèi)最普通的公辦的學(xué)校之一，一模定位：120分左右）

只有同輩作文，才能深有感觸；只有對(duì)比原文和我的修改稿，才能懂得寫(xiě)作之道。請(qǐng)珍惜最干貨！

2.An act of (為清潔工提供食物和水篇）

學(xué)生原稿： 得分：7+6+1=14分 B檔

An act of is very to us it can make us feel very .

Last week I saw a the .It was a very hot day so he very ,hot and .He to have the .Then I to give him a hand.I a of milk tea for him.He was so that he me.

An act of me feel very and I am glad to do kind.

我的修改稿： (完全根據(jù)學(xué)生原文內(nèi)容基礎(chǔ)上的小修改，請(qǐng)仔細(xì)對(duì)照，并比較區(qū)別)

得分至少為：8+7.5+3.5=19分 A檔

An act of not only a in need, but also a who help a of .

Last week，I was home when I saw a the . As it was a hot day, he a lot and was wet all over. He very and and to have his job. When I was why he didn't stop to some and take a rest, I his on the .Then I to give him a hand. I a of iced tea from the shop and him some of my that I had for . I also lied to him that I had had for . He my and food and me over and over .

When I saw him food and with a on his face in the , I felt so and was of my act of .